What do you think of this dark poem? c/c's please?

First off Autumnlov---Fall IS the best time of year---listen to Barry Manilows "When October Goes"--great song. Second, it's not gay, and he should up the voltage or dosage. Third, This is so raw with truth it's almost to the bone, and a lot of the world is dark! And let me see First, Second, Third,--ok Fourth, Having verses with differing amounts of lines, as you know being a writer, sometimes backfires, but not here. It works for you. Great Job,------------------------------------…